on acp-2021-133

a the and differences between the responses of the GeoMIP G6 sulfur and G6 solar experiments, a of the uncertainties


L15 -aerosol's?
L19 -should that be a full stop rather than a colon?L21 -Is there something that could be said for precipitation change?L38 -missing space, 4x.L60 -by the stratospheric circulation L62 -missing close bracker.L70 -perhaps add a short phrase linking this list of analysis to the goal of exploring these uncertainties.

L71 -experimental
L80 -distributions L81 -put parentheses and cites after "stratospheric processes" L93 -I think here or elsewhere it is worth reflecting on the view that RCP8.5 is not just a high emissions scenario but an implausibly high emissions scenario, or at least adding a few words of caution around this scenario.This might be raised in the conclusion or introduction instead.L94 -I'd suggest parentheses have been overused in this document, here for example.L95 -drop spatially, put the parenthetical statement between commas.L105 -Perhaps flip the order of this sentence to make it easier to follow: "The teams updated the reduction in solar constant, and the prescribed aerosols … at different intervals, two did so every decade, …." L112 -to within 0.2 C of SSP2-4.5 levels.
L114 -there are a variety?L115 -produce a large spread for the two scenarios.
Figure 1 -there's a lonely degree symbol, should it just be a K? I'd guess that the ensemble members have been plotted for each model but this isn't stated.
L126 -What about radiative forcing?Surely the response to CO2 forcing and solar forcing are related, even if the % change in insolation and the response per doubling of CO2 are not.
L130 -Figure 2f?And does it show this?Where is the model spread without normalization?Is this a generalizable result or a chance occurrence due to the make-up of ensemble?
Figure 2d -R-squared is 0.0, is that right?L140 -Should that be the other way round, incoming minus outgoing, i.e. positive = more energy input to the earth system?L142 -a much more consistent L144 -two forcings L145 -rephrase?And drop "indeed" L146 -is necessary L146 -drop indeed L148 -more in general?More generally?L161 -models' L171 -new paragraph?L178 -can't be made.
L183 -Are there papers comparing the simulated Pinatubo response and observed Pinatubo response for these models?That would be a valuable point of comparison.
Figure 4 -the Pinatubo box is clunky and hard to read, is there a better way to present this information?Here and in other relevant figures, it's probably worth mentioning that the yellow and orange lines fully overlap.Panel c -the panel title is too long, how about: "G6 sulfur AOD compared with Pinatubo".In the caption: "the year with a global AOD CLOSEST to that OF Pinatubo" L194 -this sentence is hard to follow, consider revising.L200 -this last sentence is also a little muddled, consider revising.L21 -I think this is reasonable, isn't there a citation to back that up?L214 -this comparison is not fair, the forcing from Pinatubo has had only a year to act, whereas for G6sulfur it has had a few decades.This suggests that the simulated response may be weaker than the observed Pinatubo response.Figure 5 -Is SSP2-4.5 a typo?Should that be SSP5-8.5? 246 -difference rather than differences.And should that be radiative perturbation from CO2.
L250 -stratospheric heating repeated?L251 -is this inability to restore the ocean state of the same character as the other things listed?It seems to be a consequence rather than a driver of differences in response.Though perhaps I've misunderstood the point.L255 -Is Macmartin the right reference to introduce this analysis?Won't the main point of Macmartin still hold?I.e., that the uncertain degree of warming under RCP8.5, that is absent or reduced in solar geo scenarios, is itself associated with regional climate changes and hence drives model spread (and uncertainty).The Macmartin argument applies to the spread in RCP8.5 projections as compared to those of G6.L260 -I'd suggest not switching the order of comparison here, i.e., the spread is larger in G6 sulfur.
L261 -I think it is a mischaracterization to say that G6sulfur is unable to cool down the Norther high latitudes.It looks to me as if ~2/3 of the warming difference has been offset.This should be rephrased to make clear that it is at least partially effective.L263 -Is this definitely due to heating rather than some other factor?L265 -although, if I recall correctly it's of smaller magnitude than would be expected from just the difference in radiative forcing due to countervailing circulation changes, right?
Figure 6 -Why do the colobars not have "greater than" extensions?The lack of such extensions suggests that all points in the arctic in 6c, for example, see less than 1.1C of warming.Is that correct?Should note the change in colorbar range between a and c and e. L346 -will occur over the tropics, rather than observed.
L358 -this last sentence is very long, consider splitting.Should that be "direct effects of CO2", as in the CO2 physiological effect or is this also CO2 radiative effects too?Changes in dynamical changes?L360 -Could this effect be quantified, i.e., what's the land-mean precipitation error for those two projections?Table 1 -CMIP6 doi?Is that a typo for MPI models, i.e., should it read: "r1,r2,r3" and not "r1,r2,r"?Table 2 -should "last decade (2081-2100)" be "last 2 decades (2081-2100)"?
Figure 10 -The side-panels don't line up with the maps and it's hard to read given the number of colourful lines, I'd suggest pulling them out to a separate figure as little is gained from combining them with the maps.I also would only show one experiment for absolute plots.L370 -"reduction in global-mean precipitation" should be elaborated to make clear what that reduction is relative to, as there is also a reduction seen in SSP2-4.5 relative to SSP5-8.5.
L372 -This sentence has a strange structure, consider revising.L385 -no need to specify air, although it could be specified in air temperature.
L386 -this second half could be rephrased.
L415 -(and more) at wrong point.L422 -rephrase -not even the most ideal.
L425 -restoring or maintaining the ITCZ location?
Figure 11 -stratospheric aerosol intervention -first time used."more particularly".Just a suggestion, but this might be easier to follow if the boxes were ordered from top to bottom: stratospheric heating and aerosols top (the inputs) à stratospheric chem, dynamics and aerosol chem / microphysics à Radiative forcing + surface climate (the outputs).

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Figure S1 -are there negative AOD values?